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Week Twelve: reflection

These final two chapters, I am both proud of and disappointed by. I am happy with the way I tied everything back together, and that I showed how they had to work through things before they could start a healthy relationship. I didn't want them to spend all that time apart and then act like it never happened, as time apart in that situation does a lot of damage. I wanted them to have to work through those problems and then  work on their relationship. I feel like I touched on this, however I don't think I went into it enough. Another thing I was disappointed in was the way I wrote the fight scene. I wanted them to cut deep into each other and pick each other apart, however I feel that I maybe didn't develop them enough to be able to do this enough. All I could draw on was Alex's inability to get out of his own head and Mark's inability to communicate. In my second draft I will be looking for things to draw from in regards to this scene, as it is an important one ...

Week Twelve: chapter fifteen

It’s 12:18 tomorrow morning                   { afternoon? }                                     My face in your pillow                   your legs in my bed.                                                       This might be home. It took a while for things to get back to normal – whatever normal was for Alex and Mark. There were still holes left from th...

Week Twelve: chapter fourteen

At 12:18 tomorrow morning I thought                                     my body parts must all                   smell different.                                                                         My legs                            ...