Weel Eleven: reflection

These two chapters were the most difficult to write. I knew from the start that at the end of everything I would only tear apart the relationship I had spent so long building up, but when it came down to it, I didn't want to. I was, and am, very proud of how Alex and Mark had fallen into place together, and it hurt to destroy all of that. However, I knew that their relationship wasn't sustainable as it was, and they needed it to fall apart before they could come back together again.

In these two chapters, I am particularly proud of how I expressed the pain that Alex was going through, and the anger he had towards both himself and Mark. I needed the pain to go as deep as possible, affection his relationships with the other members of their group. I wanted to show how heartbreak can be all consuming, but that the time comes when things heal over and things get better. I wanted to show that Alex was making a recovery and that he was moving on with his life. I feel that I did this successfully, although chapter thirteen felt a bit rushed towards the end.

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